Written By: Matt Todd
PAGE ONE: 3 PANELS TOTAL
PANEL 1: Wide low angle shot of JACK MASON, Mysteryman’s true identity. He’s performing a stunt on a movie set; leaping from the top of a 1940’s Mercedes Benz truck. He is aiming to knock a NEFARIOUS LOOKING VILLAIN off of his horse.
NARRATOR (MYSTERYMAN): MY NAME’S JACK MASON.
NARRATOR (MYSTERYMAN) (2ND Inset): I MADE THE JUMP. I TOOK THE PUNCH. BUT I NEVER GOT THE CLOSE UP.
PANEL 2: Medium shot of Jack in a cheap plain brown suit and a skinny black tie. It’s the best suit he could afford. He is sitting at a table with a microphone. He is at a H.U.A.C. (House Un-American Activities Committee) hearing. His expression is a crucible of emotions, mainly confusion mixed with seething rage. He has nothing to say to the committee.
NARRATOR (MYSTERYMAN): I WAS A MARINE. I SERVED MY COUNTRY IN THE PACIFIC. THEN THE GOVERNMENT CALLED ME A COMMUNIST… WITH MY HONOR AND CAREER GONE, MY FRIENDS STOPPED CALLING ALTOGETHER.
PANEL 3: Medium shot of Jack in complete costume sans domino mask and hood (See attached reference for costume design). He is holding the mask in both hands; his expression is a mix of hesitation and anticipation. This is the reflective moment of acceptance before his life changes and he starts on his new path
NARRATOR (MYSTERYMAN): IF THERE’S ONE THING I LEARNED BEING IN THE PICTURES, IT’S THAT THE WORLD LOVES A HERO. SO I TAKE A COSTUME FROM WARDROBE.
PAGE TWO: ONE PANEL SPLASH PAGE
PANEL 1: SPLASH PAGE, Mysteryman stands revealed on Hollywood rooftop. He’s poised for action with a smirk on his face. (See attached reference for full costume design).
NARRATOR (MYSTERYMAN): NOW THE PAPERS CALL ME “MYSTERYMAN.”I’LL PLAY THE PART. I’LL GIVE THEM A SHOW. AND WHEN THE TIME’S RIGHT I’LL REVEAL WHO I AM AND CLEAR MY NAME.
Mysteryman: ALL ABOUT EVE
Created and Written By: Matt Todd
PAGE ONE: 5 PANELS TOTAL
PANEL 1: Full Tier. We open on an over the shoulder shot of a theater that’s reminiscent of the Pantages Theater. It’s Award Night. Through the spotlights and spectacle the only words we can really make out on the marquee are 23rd and AWARDS. The spotlights are shining; the street is packed with cars, the sidewalks packed with onlookers. Really accentuate the glamour.
INSET TEXT: LOS ANGELES. MARCH 1951.
NARRATOR (MYSTERYMAN): HOORAY FOR HOLLYWOOD.
PANEL 2: Reverse angle. We see MYSTERYMAN. He’s holding a pair of binoculars. He’s perched above the neon Army Navy Surplus sign, across the street from the theater.
NARRATOR (MYSTERYMAN): EVEN BEFORE MCCARTHY, I WASN’T INVITED TO THIS PARTY. THERE’S NO AWARD FOR “ BEST LEAP OFF A BUILDING.”
PANEL 3: Close up two-shot of what Mysteryman is looking at through his binoculars, a couple. MICKEY DRAGNA and EVE GRANGER. Mickey is a rough gangster in his early 40’s. He is dressed to the nines in the finest tuxedo money can buy. He’s smiling; it’s a smile of pride and defiance. He is showing off the fact that a rough and tough guy like him has a beautiful woman on his arm and is hobnobbing with the stars. EVE GRANGER is a beautiful starlet in her mid 20’s. She is positively stunning in a sleek, elegant gown. She looks like a movie star through and through.
NARRATOR (MYSTERYMAN): EVE GRANGER AND MICKEY DRAGNA. WORD ON THE LOT, PRODUCERS “GAVE” EVE HER CLOSE UP AFTER SHE GAVE MICKEY ONE.
PANEL 4: Extreme close up. Through his binoculars Mysteryman looks at the top of the marquee. He sees a glint of light off of a riflescope and a rifle’s barrel.
NARRATOR (MYSTERYMAN): ENOUGH STARGAZING. TIME TO GET BACK TO WO
PANEL 5: Close up of Mysteryman as he pops to attention, shouting.
MYSTERYMAN: GET DOWN!
PAGE TWO: 5 PANELS TOTAL
PANEL 1: As chaos breaks out amongst the crowd, we focus on Mickey, acting surprisingly calm while under gunfire. One hand is protecting his head; the other is pulling a panicked Eve to the ground. Two bullets hit the ground around them. A third round strikes an innocent bystander in the shoulder.
SFX: BAM!!! BAM!!!
INNOCENT BYSTANDER: AAAHHH!!!
PANEL 2: High angle bust shot of Mysteryman. Standing on top of the Army Navy sign, he is pointing a grapnel gun right at us. The GRAPNEL GUN should look like a movie prop that Mysteryman has jury-rigged to actually work.
PANEL 3: Close up of the grapnel hook hitting near the “P” at the top of the theater sign.
PANEL 4: Dynamic shot of Mysteryman holding on to the grapnel gun as he leaps off the sign.
NARRATOR (MYSTERYMAN): THIS BETTER WORK.
PANEL 5: Close up of the sniper, FREDDY NEESON. Freddy is sweating profusely as he is looking down the scope of his rifle. In the scope we see the reflection of Mysteryman’s silhouette, swinging towards him feet first.
PAGE THREE: 5 PANELS TOTAL
PANEL 1: Mysteryman swings feet first into Freddy. Hitting him hard, Freddy flies back, dropping the rifle.
PANEL 2: We’re behind Mysteryman as he stands up. Freddy is still on the ground in front of him. Keep the rifle in panel.
MYSTERYMAN: TRYING TO DROP MICKEY DRAGNA??? THERE’RE EASIER WAYS TO OFF YOURSELF.
PANEL 3: Close up of Freddy as he’s standing up. He’s shorter than Mysteryman, but he’s a bulky bruiser of a man. He’s got the build of a boxer. He’s wiping blood from his lip with his left hand. In his right hand he flicks open a mean looking switchblade knife.
FREDDY: DRAGNA??? TO HELL WITH HIM.
PANEL 4: Two-shot over Freddy’s shoulder as he tries to slash Mysteryman across the face. Mysteryman dodges it, and starts to grab Freddy’s arm.
PANEL 5: Close up of Mysteryman as he drives his knee into Freddy’s gut. Freddy drops the knife.
NARRATOR (MYSTERYMAN): HE’S FAST FOR HIS SIZE, BUT SLOPPY.
PAGE FOUR: 6 PANELS TOTAL
PANEL 1: Close up of Mysteryman hitting Freddy in the face with a hard left hook.
PANEL 2: Freddy catches Mysteryman off guard with a punch to the kidneys.
PANEL 3: Freddy purposely whips his head up headbutting Mysteryman
PANEL 4: Close up of Freddy’s hand as he leans over to pick up his rifle.
FREDDY: TH…THIS HAS NOTHING TO DO WITH DRAGNA.
PANEL 5: Two shot. In the foreground we see Freddy from the waist up, his head is held low, like he is ashamed, but he is too far gone. He has his rifle and is heading towards his original firing position. In the background we see Mysteryman trying to pick himself up as he clutches his side.
MYSTERYMAN: STOP!!! YOU KILL DRAGNA. HIS THUGS KILL YOU. IT’S NOT WORTH IT!!!
FREDDY: SHE BROKE MY HEART!!!
PANEL 6: Close up Freddy putting the rifle up to his eye, Freddy is tearing up.
FREDDY: GOODBYE MY LOVE.
PAGE FIVE: 6 PANELS TOTAL
PANEL 1: Full Tier of Mysteryman tackling Freddy. HARD. They both start going over the edge of the marquee. Beneath them we can see a convertible with its top up.
MYSTERYMAN: GO LIMP!!!
PANEL 2: Mysteryman and Freddy land on the car, crushing the soft-top roof of the convertible. Freddy lands first with Mysteryman landing on top of him. Their impact ripples through the crowd, scattering the photographers, onlookers, and police further into a chaotic retreat.
PANEL 3: Mysteryman rolls off of Freddy, who looks beat to hell. Mysteryman doesn’t look much better.
NARRATOR (MYSTERYMAN): …AND THE AWARD GOES TO.
PANEL 4:Mysteryman is standing over Freddy, who he has pulled off the roof and handcuffed. Freddy’s crouched against the convertible they just landed on. Freddy is bloodied and crying. To the right, we see Mickey Dragna holding Eve. Behind them we see the mob of onlookers, photographers, and police trying to get closer.
EVE: FREDDY?!?! WHAT’RE YOU DOING??? ARE YOU CRAZY!
PANEL 5: Close up on Freddy. Bloodied and beaten we see him for what he is, pathetic.
FREDDY: …WITH YOU GONE. EVERYTHING WENT TO HELL…WHY DID YOU LEAVE?
PANEL 6: Two-shot of Mickey and Eve. Eve is livid. Mickey is restraining her.
EVE: YOU PATHETIC…YOU COULD’VE KILLED ME!!!
MICKEY: DON’T WORRY, EVIE. IT’S HANDLED.
PAGE SIX: 5 PANELS TOTAL
PANEL 1: Close up of Freddy whose face is buried in his hands.
FREDDY: EVE. I’M SORRY. I’M SO SORRY.
NARRATOR (MYSTERYMAN): POOR FOOL’S DOLL DIZZY.
PANEL 2: Close up of Mickey. Mickey maintains his cool. In fact he is surprisingly cool for a man who has just been shot at.
MICKEY: YOU TRIED TO BUMP ME AND MY GIRL OFF? DID YOU THINK YOU’D WALK AWAY FROM THIS?
PANEL 3: Profile. Mysteryman steps between Mickey, Eve, and Freddy. Mysteryman is trying to diffuse the situation.
FREDDY: OH GOD.
MYSTERYMAN: COPS ARE HERE MICKEY. IT’S OVER. HE’S DONE FOR.
PANEL 4: Profile two shot of Mysteryman and Mickey. Mickey edges closer to Mysteryman. Freddy’s fate is sealed and a smile is just starting to creep across Mickey’s face.
MICKEY: DAMN RIGHT HE IS…
MICKEY (2ND BALLOON:): NOW SCRAM WISEGUY, OR I’LL BURY YOU TOO.
PANEL 5: Profile two-shot of Mysteryman and Mickey. Mysteryman’s expression is one of restrained anger. Mickey has stepped even closer to Mysteryman, Mickey’s defiant smile is back. He did not blink when Freddy took a shot at him. Some guy in a costume sure as hell won’t intimidate him.
MYSTERYMAN: WALK AWAY. NOW.
PAGE SEVEN: 5 PANELS TOTAL
PANEL 1: Full tier. In the foreground, Mysteryman sucker punches Mickey. In the background we see shocked onlookers and more importantly photographers snapping pictures. Their camera flashes echo the explosive power of the punch. The police are finally starting to break through the crowds.
PANEL 2: Close up. Mickey is holding his face. Mysteryman has finally made him lose his temper. His normally calm public persona slips away if only for a moment.
MICKEY: SON OF A… JUST KILL YOURSELF. SAVE ME THE TIME.
PANEL 3: Mysteryman taking a bow. In his outstretched hand we can see a smoke grenade from his utility belt. His thumb is in the pin. Cops have finally made their way through the crowd of photographers and onlookers.
POLICE OFFICER: STOP!!!
MYSTERYMAN: THAT’S MY CUE. SEE YOU AROUND MICKEY. EVE.
PANEL 4: We are looking over Mysteryman’s shoulder as he tosses the smoke grenade between himself, Mickey, and Eve. Smoke is shooting out of the grenade.
PANEL 5: The smoke is clearing out. The cops, Mickey and Eve are all angry, shocked, and coughing. Mysteryman is nowhere in sight.
PAGE EIGHT: 5 PANELS TOTAL
PANEL 1: Freddy is in his jail cell. He’s terrified. In the foreground we see the silhouette of a baton, and a blackjack.
INSET TEXT: SEVERAL NIGHTS LATER.
NARRATOR (MYSTERYMAN): FREDDY DIDN’T HAVE LONG.
PANEL 2: Reverse angle inside the cell. In the background we see two police officers walking away in silhouette. In the foreground we see Freddy’s feet. He has been beaten and hanged.
NARRATOR (MYSTERYMAN): THE SUCKER PUNCH WAS A CHEAP SHOT. I’D HOPED WITH MICKEY LOOKING FOR ME, IT’D BUY FREDDY MORE TIME.
PANEL 3: Full Tier profile shot of Mysteryman. He is unmasked with his jacket open. He should look a little worse for wear, like he just got back from patrol. He is staring at a newspaper. We can’t read the newspaper’s headline. Mysteryman’s expression is stoic. He is sitting at the end of his bed in his apartment. The apartment is mostly bare; it’s basically a room with a cot. Since his blacklisting, Jack has had to sell most of his possessions to pay the rent. We can see a map of Los Angeles on the wall behind him. In front of him is the most prominent object in the room, his Marine footlocker. It’s open serving like he has been looking This box is precious to Jack as it holds all that remains of his former life.
NARRATOR (MYSTERYMAN): FREDDY LOST EVERYTHING AND IT DROVE HIM OVER THE EDGE. I CAN’T EXCUSE WHAT HE DID.
PANEL 4: Close up profile of Jack Mason. He is holding the newspaper so that we can now make out the newspaper headline, AWARDS SHOOTER TAKES OWN LIFE??? This is the beat where it hits him that even in victory he has lost. This is the one moment where the normally stoic yet confident Jack Mason is caught off guard with a twinge of sadness. He finally sees some parallels between him and Freddy Neeson.
NARRATOR (MYSTERYMAN): BUT I’VE SEEN IT HAPPEN TO BETTER MEN.
PANEL 5: Close up of Jacks domino mask.
NARRATOR (MYSTERYMAN) (2ND Inset): …IT HAPPENED TO ME.
MYSTERYMAN: COMING SOON
PAGE ONE: 4 PANELS TOTAL
PANEL 1: Full Tier. Mysteryman is in a casino sliding across a roulette table sending poker chips everywhere.
INSET TEXT: COMING SOON…
SECOND INSET: THRILLS!!!
PANEL 2: Full Tier. In the foreground we see a lanky looking man, ALAN FOSTER. Alan is holding up a syringe. Behind him two men are holding a third man down. The third’s head is being tilted back allowing easier access for Alan to insert the syringe up the man’s nose.
INSET TEXT: CHILLS!!!
PANEL 3: Bust shot of Mysteryman. He’s holding a WWII Marine issue .45 automatic handgun, with one hand pointing it right at us. Mysteryman’s expression is intense, perfectly capturing the internal battle in his mind about whether or not to fire the gun.
INSET TEXT: DEADLY DECISIONS!!!
PANEL 4: Full Tier. Mysteryman engaged in combat with his archenemy,*REDACTED* is revealed. *REDACTED* is 6 feet, 200 lbs. lean and lethal. He is holding a WWII Japanese bayonet. His costume is a simple black tuxedo. A draped black silk hood covers his face. On the hood is a skull (See attached reference). His eyes peer out of the skull. The costume is simple, elegant, and very creepy. Mysteryman’s expression should be one of anxious apprehension essentially he knows this is not just any mobster or hood, this is an enemy to fear.
INSET TEXT: AND DASTARDLY VILLAINS!!!